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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:11:27 GMT -5
I let out a growl and punched the person that was holding me and I ran to the direction of Hope. I didn't make it far cause soon the had me tied up. "No let me go my baby needs me." I yelled. While thrashing around. The ignored me and dragged/carried me out of there to what i perssume was there pack house. they dragged me for about a good twenty minutes. I heard Hope's cries getting louder and louder. I was still struggling and cursing them. But one duck taped, yes i said duck taped my mouth. So I kept quiet and listened to my baby cry. We finnaly came to the pack house but it looked like a huge palace for some royal. They took me inside and took me downstairs in the basement. they threw me in a cage. I smelled blood and rouges. I also smelt the sweet smell of pineapples which was Hope. I listened even more carefully. She was crying. "Mama where are you?" She whispered.
I wanted to tell her I was here near her. But Those bastards still didn't take the duck tape and ropes off. I sat there and started to hum a lullaby to her. She slowly fell asleep. I heard the basement door bang open. I heard footsteps make there way towards my cell. In came a man with dark brown hair and grey eyes. I held power in him maybe the third in command. He came in my cell and
Thats what i have so far
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:14:32 GMT -5
Ooooh, sounds very suspenseful. I'm intrigued already. Hmmm... give me a moment. XD
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:16:04 GMT -5
Its on wattpad if you want to read it this is part of the 3rd chapter so i kinda ruined it for you if your going to read it sorry
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:16:52 GMT -5
Huh, alright let me think. So right now both the Nichols and the mother are in seperate cells. Ok, now forgive me if I ask many questions, but do you plan on having the mother getting hurt a all durin the chapter/scene?
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:19:03 GMT -5
Yeah im planning some one coming in the cell and hurting her ~shes also captured by her mates pack the royal pack~ She has a duaghter
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:19:32 GMT -5
and its okay your helping me so you can ask thousands of questions i won't mind
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:23:58 GMT -5
Hurting her in front of the child or taken to a separate room? Cause if it's in front of the child, you could make a really nice paragraph or two on the mother... I don't know... Maybe regretting that the child had to see it?
Or like, if the child starts crying, you could have the mother hum that lullaby to the child WHILE the mother is being hurt. Maybe?
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:24:58 GMT -5
Okay thank you thank you thank you soo much
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:27:59 GMT -5
No problem at all ^-^ That's why we are here for right?
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:31:48 GMT -5
I know but still you helped and so saying thank you is the least i can do
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:35:58 GMT -5
It was my pleasure really! Good luck with the rest of the chapter though! Hope it turns out great!
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:36:34 GMT -5
thank you And hopefully it turns out good
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:50:23 GMT -5
I'm sure it will. Now I need to find inspiration and grow the courage to make a French oral presentation xD
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:51:48 GMT -5
id help but i suck in french I have to go bye guys
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2013 13:56:50 GMT -5
Haha bye!
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